Feedback on "IT'S NOT MY FAULT"

[Charlie Brigden]

This is my first short story in about five years, so I hope you enjoy, and I want your criticism!

<a href="http://www.chud.com/chudstories/stories/fault.php3" target="_blank">http://www.chud.com/chudstories/stories/fault.php3</a>

[Dan Whitehead]

Fucking hell! That's superb. Really, really great. I love CHUD Stories more and more with each new story, it's so cool to see what people on the board are capable of. That is such a cool story - really easy to visualise the locations, the characters, without you going overboard on the description (a weakness of mine). We really need to put a book together of this stuff.

[Charlie Brigden]

Thanks for the comments :)

I agree on the book idea. That would be very, very cool.